My hands are CLEAN. Welcome.
There is no safety in standing still
There is no ill
ness
This is the way
My way
My absolutely planned out impulsive
Dream
It’s deep
If you can’t swim
Do not get in
I can’t save you when you drown
But I can teach you how to swim
You know who
August 31, 2011 at 5:47 am
Anonymous
August 31, 2011 at 5:29 am
Happy BDay
Varun
August 31, 2011 at 5:32 am
Have A blast this year :0 yours Ulima
Varun Ulima
August 31, 2011 at 4:38 am
Happy Bday Nelly a.k.a Arora Bless you
Tally
May 25, 2011 at 2:36 am
Love how you structured it, really inventive.
Vinod Narayan
May 24, 2011 at 3:07 am
Swimming, drowning, saving and living Nice!!
Liz
May 24, 2011 at 12:40 am
This is a wonderful poem!
Harry Nicholson
May 22, 2011 at 10:36 am
An interesting spread of lines that insist that I think more deeply about the meaning.
mindlovemisery
May 21, 2011 at 5:42 am
Beautiful presentation lovely line. I love the last lines, like Lao Tzu
Life: Between the lines
May 20, 2011 at 1:32 pm
awesome presentation. I love that
Enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/20/the-spirit-of-the-sand-boa/
15homegreenhome
May 20, 2011 at 10:32 am
great form, stark, yet honest message -nice poem
Judith Evans
May 20, 2011 at 4:11 am
I enjoyed reading this! Love the way you wrote it and especially “If you can’t swim do not get in”. Well done!
clariice
May 19, 2011 at 7:57 pm
Felt closely linked to your words!
Teaching someone to swim is always the most satisfying, isnt it?
The Reason You Come
May 19, 2011 at 12:26 pm
Wow, I like the strength and the sassiness of the message. And that’s quite a creative form!
Jingle
May 19, 2011 at 5:45 am
welcome back….
have fun!
love the creativity in your piece.
Rashmi
May 19, 2011 at 4:58 am
So wonder ful….
(Dream—-deep—if you drown ….Cant save….)
Beautiful………
Henry Clemmons
May 19, 2011 at 2:50 am
Such a clever presentation. It can be read in many different ways and each one is kool. SUper skill here. Great write and read!!!!!!!!
Varun
May 16, 2011 at 5:05 pm
Everyone loves you so much
ladynyo
October 6, 2010 at 12:11 pm
Interesting poem with interesting form.
Lady Nyo
Dr Madan Goyal
October 6, 2010 at 11:51 am
This is my first visit to the blog.
It is really great.
I offer help to people who are partly drowned but not yet gone and yet not been able to learn to swim.
Emmanuel Ibok
September 6, 2010 at 10:09 pm
I love the concluding part…i would have said the same…nice one…cheers!
RiikaInfinityy 마왕
September 1, 2010 at 6:09 am
Wonderfully written, thank for sharing^^ And happy birthday Nelly !=D May all your wishes come true and have fun^^
splashofexpression
September 1, 2010 at 4:55 am
Almost as if your texts were rocking back and forth. My ride is only for those with a tough stomach. Happy Belated Birthday!!
Harshika
September 1, 2010 at 4:03 am
HAPPY BIRTHDAY NELLS!!!!
frayedges
September 1, 2010 at 2:09 am
Happy Birthday Nelly! I hope it was great. Party, party!
Gally Lines ~ LestISmiteThee.wordpress.com
August 31, 2010 at 7:50 pm
Happy birthday!
Jingle
August 31, 2010 at 7:47 pm
pick up an award from my post,
Happy Birthday 2 u!
frayedges
August 29, 2010 at 5:32 pm
I have awards for you. Pass them on to 1 to 10 friends!
http://frayedges.wordpress.com/2010/08/29/846/
mother2rah
August 28, 2010 at 6:35 pm
Wish we could all learn that we only save ourselves by learning to swim.
frayedges
August 26, 2010 at 9:43 pm
I like it, very cool! The ending is the best “I can teach you how to swim.” Great line.
Morganna
August 20, 2010 at 3:48 am
Great poem.
Jamie Dedes
August 20, 2010 at 1:10 am
Unique style. Fine sentiment. Thanks! Like the combo of pic’s and poetry here.
Welcome to the Rally!
frayedges
August 20, 2010 at 12:33 am
The format is different. I had to read it twice…very cool.
NotATameLion
July 15, 2010 at 2:42 am
I FELT this one.
trisha
June 29, 2010 at 11:18 am
your banner is brilliant!
trisha
June 29, 2010 at 11:18 am
just fantastic
Luke Prater
June 24, 2010 at 6:56 pm
Love the inventive structure. Cheers for the visit.
best
Luke
Jingle
June 22, 2010 at 3:36 pm
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/06/22/the-celebrate-poet-of-may-award-and-more/
one poetry award: the celebrate poet of May honorable mention,
three general awards,
Happy Tuesday!
buttercup600
June 22, 2010 at 2:34 am
You are awesome:)
Jingle
June 20, 2010 at 1:52 am
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/06/19/thursday-poets-rally-week-23-poetry-awards-special-notice/
all 5 awards for you.
many thanks!
No Rally next week.
nanno1982
June 18, 2010 at 11:18 pm
this was absolutely daring and amazing..
i loved this one.
brian
June 18, 2010 at 11:15 pm
wow. great structure and the last couple lines blow it righ out of the the water. great write…
unprecedentedintellectual
June 18, 2010 at 9:33 pm
i Do not get in
I can’t save you when you drown
But I can teach you how to swim
most of my friends can’t swim…this makes me lol!
Joe Suzz
June 18, 2010 at 8:48 pm
“there is no safety standing still” i defintely agree with that line. no is secure in this life, so might as well move.
thevivaciousmelancholic
June 18, 2010 at 2:55 pm
NICE!
andyveilleux
June 18, 2010 at 12:51 pm
This is well done, thanks for sharing!
fiveloaf
June 18, 2010 at 9:04 am
hmm- makes me think! anyway tq nell for dropping by my blog- feel free to browse anytime! just dig the archives..
D.S. Lear
June 18, 2010 at 4:33 am
“There is no safety in standing still” profoundly truthful line..nice writing! Enjoy the Rally!
soulintention: signed .............bkm
June 18, 2010 at 4:28 am
Dream …it is deep….love it..thank you for stopping in my site…bkm
suzicate
June 18, 2010 at 1:31 am
My absolutely planned out impulsive
Dream
Like that!
NotATameLion
June 18, 2010 at 12:47 am
I like it.
Jingle
June 17, 2010 at 5:57 pm
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/06/16/thursday-poets-rally-week-23-june-17-23-2010/
welcome join our Poets Rally…
please let me know by commenting,
the requirement is to comment for 18 perfect poet winners of week 22 under week 23 list…
Nelly
June 17, 2010 at 7:03 pm
i will do this
how do you know that i view them?
Jingle
June 18, 2010 at 12:56 am
I read your comments on their blogs…
Jingle
June 17, 2010 at 5:56 pm
lovely poem,
the immage and the words make a perfect match!