There is no safety in standing still
There is no ill
ness
This is the way
My way
My absolutely planned out impulsive
Dream
It’s deep
If you can’t swim
Do not get in
I can’t save you when you drown
But I can teach you how to swim
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Beautiful!
I’m drawn to the way you’ve positioned your words. Lovely.
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Liked the poem. I get it. Thanks for the follow. I’ll come back when the poetry class is over.
I can’t save you when you drown
But i can teach you how to swim”
Wow!! its beautiful..
“There is no safety in standing still” feels like it can fit anywhere. I often use this quote for myself. Thank you.
Happy Bday Nelly a.k.a Arora Bless you
Love how you structured it, really inventive.
Swimming, drowning, saving and living Nice!!
This is a wonderful poem!
An interesting spread of lines that insist that I think more deeply about the meaning.
Beautiful presentation lovely line. I love the last lines, like Lao Tzu
awesome presentation. I love that 🙂
Enjoy the rally!
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great form, stark, yet honest message -nice poem
I enjoyed reading this! Love the way you wrote it and especially “If you can’t swim do not get in”. Well done!
Felt closely linked to your words!
Teaching someone to swim is always the most satisfying, isnt it? 🙂
Wow, I like the strength and the sassiness of the message. And that’s quite a creative form!
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have fun!
love the creativity in your piece.
🙂
So wonder ful….
(Dream—-deep—if you drown ….Cant save….)
Beautiful………
Such a clever presentation. It can be read in many different ways and each one is kool. SUper skill here. Great write and read!!!!!!!!
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Interesting poem with interesting form.
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This is my first visit to the blog.
It is really great.
I offer help to people who are partly drowned but not yet gone and yet not been able to learn to swim.
I love the concluding part…i would have said the same…nice one…cheers!
Wonderfully written, thank for sharing^^ And happy birthday Nelly !=D May all your wishes come true and have fun^^
Almost as if your texts were rocking back and forth. My ride is only for those with a tough stomach. Happy Belated Birthday!!
HAPPY BIRTHDAY NELLS!!!! 😀
Happy Birthday Nelly! I hope it was great. Party, party!
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Wish we could all learn that we only save ourselves by learning to swim.
I like it, very cool! The ending is the best “I can teach you how to swim.” Great line.
Great poem.
Unique style. Fine sentiment. Thanks! Like the combo of pic’s and poetry here.
Welcome to the Rally!
The format is different. I had to read it twice…very cool.
I FELT this one.
your banner is brilliant!
just fantastic 🙂
Love the inventive structure. Cheers for the visit.
best
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this was absolutely daring and amazing..
i loved this one.
wow. great structure and the last couple lines blow it righ out of the the water. great write…
i Do not get in
I can’t save you when you drown
But I can teach you how to swim
most of my friends can’t swim…this makes me lol!
“there is no safety standing still” i defintely agree with that line. no is secure in this life, so might as well move.
NICE!
This is well done, thanks for sharing!
hmm- makes me think! anyway tq nell for dropping by my blog- feel free to browse anytime! just dig the archives..
“There is no safety in standing still” profoundly truthful line..nice writing! Enjoy the Rally!
Dream …it is deep….love it..thank you for stopping in my site…bkm
My absolutely planned out impulsive
Dream
Like that!
I like it.
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lovely poem,
the immage and the words make a perfect match!